Monday, May 21, 2012

Losing Sight of the Original Idea: Pam Bachorz's "Drought."


My first grievance with this week’s book was that I totally did not understand the plot line. From the title, Drought, I got it into my head that I was going to read about a world where there was no rain, and that the main characters foraged for it. This is not the case. And by the time I wrapped my head around the real plot—that this is a book about a religious cult starring a girl whose blood can heal wounds and grant you almost-eternal life—the author’s subplot careened off course and became the main plot line. 

Since 1812, this Congregation has been living in the Adirondack foothills, scavenging for water. Before 1812, a woman named Sula met a man named Otto, whose blood had magical qualities. Sula fell in love with Otto, and the two formed a religion of sorts, gathering in believers. Of course, America in1812 was not tolerant of Otto’s claims to fame. Otto runs away, leaving his Congregation, and a pregnant Sula, behind.
When Ruby is born, a man named Darwin West has virtually enslaved the Congregation, forcing them to collect water, which he believes holds the key to immortal life. It is, although no one knows it but Sula and the Elder’s, Ruby’s blood that gives the Water its life-giving qualities. 

And then one day, an Overseer comes to monitor the Congregation. Unlike the other Overseers, he is kind, and gentle, and very attractive to Ruby…


This was not the book that was advertised, and not the book that I believe the author, Pam Bachorz, wanted to write. 


To put what I mean into perspective, we need to take a quick look at Pam Bachorz’s other book, Candor.
Candor is a place where everyone is brainwashed with mind messages, and the main character, Oscar, manages to find a way to negate them. Oscar even manages to make some profit rescuing teenagers from the subliminal messages and getting them out of Florida. However, his life is turned upside down when a girl shows up in the city of Candor…

The common thread between both books is brainwashing. Ruby, the main character in Drought, is brainwashed into believing that her Congregation’s Christ-like figure will come back and rescue her people from slavery. Ford, her lover, is brainwashed into thinking that Jesus is the only person whose blood has supernatural entities. They’re all brainwashed, the same way that Candor was brainwashed into following subliminal messages. These are books about power, these are books about control, and these are books on how your mind can be a prison. 

However, you have a very hard time guessing that. 

Everything needed to make this book good is there. Sula is abusive towards her daughter, seeing her as less holy than Otto, even though they share the same blood, with the same qualities. Ruby is just a commodity to Sula, whose blood will hold the Congregation until Otto can come back and save them from Darwin West. Her mind is trapped by a dangerous belief, that it is Otto who saves, and Otto who will return, and she is so convinced of this she is willing to deny her own daughter. 

An interesting parallel to this is Pam Bachorz’s insistence on making Ford, Ruby’s lover, a Catholic. This is a detail that is not necessary at all in the story. In fact, it’s downright annoying, to have a love scene, followed by Ford asserting that only Christ’s blood is holy, and Ruby is sinning, but oh, isn’t Ruby so sexy…?
With some tweaking, Bachorz could have made this an interesting comparison. The Congregation believes Otto Saves, and Otto Will Return. Christians believe that Christ saves, and Christ Will Return. What is the difference between a Cult and a Religion? Is there a difference at all? 

I kept waiting for Pam Bachorz to make these connections, or even subtly make the reader connect the dots for herself, but she didn’t. The only reason I caught this at all is because I myself am Roman Catholic, and her portrayal of Ford as a Roman Catholic irked me (because he was doing it wrong!). 

In fact, once Ford and Ruby start to get romantically involved, the plot dies. All Ruby wants to do is run away with him, at one point even abandoning her very sick mother to spend the night with him at the movies. As the reader, I was appalled by Ruby’s behavior, and could not understand how she could leave her mother. 

Everything that this book could have been is distorted by Ford and Ruby’s romantic entanglement. Ruby forsakes her Congregation, herself, and her ideas to be with him, and the way Pam Bachorz words it, Ruby appears to leave the Congregation more to be with Ford than to look for Otto. By the way the book ends, I would guess Bachorz is planning a sequel, but I have no idea how she is going to pull that off. The reader still has no idea where Otto is hiding, and all I can imagine Ruby doing in the outside world is eating and making love to Ford. 

Ruby is in no way the strong character that Pam Bachorz hoped for, and her writing left me very dissatisfied. She was unable to tell the story she really wanted to tell, penning instead a watery, unsteady version of the novel this could have been. This is the greatest disappointment for me. When a writer is unable to write the story she meant to tell, that is a sure sign that she has failed.

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